Matt Bellamy

This has a lot of potential. Let's go through it. he fell down she offered a hand he hit the ground she helped him stand I liked this stanza - ...

I find the concept somewhat cliché and overdone. The ending came suddenly and unexpectedly, and disappointed me a little because this kind of poem has been done so many times. ...

April? I'm beginning to think people are afraid of critiquing long poems ;) As am I *blush* You have a very distinct style, which I like. Your imagery is good ...

This was well written. However, I am guessing the reason why it has yet to be critiqued is that it is rather long, and a little difficult to "get". I ...

*Gasp* 9th of May? Why hasn't this been critiqued? Shame on you, YWS! Anyway, I liked this. It flowed nicely, the rhythm is good, and I like the concept. However: ...

wow, I adore this. Great concept, great tone, well written. Just a few suggestions: This is a letter to my father, A letter to my mother. This a letter to ...

I love this concept, and I think the repetition of questions works really well. The only thing I would say is that the last couple of lines in each stanza ...

I generally don't like second person narrative very much, and find it difficult to write, but this wasn't too bad. "Drown in your own sorrows" seems a little cliché/overused...but then, ...

A train of bikers moved slowly along a deserted path. They continued doggedly on even though their limbs were exhausted and they were all panting half-heartedly. All of them have ...

Ooh. I've not heard of this kind of poem before, which makes it difficult to critique, since I don't have past experience with them to compare it to. I will ...

I loved the pace of this piece, I think the flow is great. A few things I'm unsure about: don't keep me waiting - hit the action action Did you ...

I liked this. I would have liked it more if they had been good friends at the end, with no hard feelings and everyone lived happily ever after, but that's ...

This is very sweet. Just as sweet as your avatar, in fact :) Yeah, that's all I have to say :P *scuttles off*

The hills sparkled with the lift rain that drizzled down. She stood in the center of it all, He hair was the wind, whisking around her childlike face. She began ...

Yo, wiggy! :) A nice idea to use flowing haiku's, I must try this sometime. And because they are haiku's, I can't really say anything that will change the syllable ...